Here's how tagging works
(although some of you already know this):
1. Go to page 77 of your current MS, WIP.
2. Go to line 7.
3. Copy down the next 7 lines, sentences or paragraphs and
post them as they are written.
4. Tag 7 authors.
5. Let them know.
Soooooo, here are my 7 sentences: (The car in question is a Model-T)
All at once everything returned to me--Father's struggles to keep the top up; rain pouring down; all of us pushing to free the wheels from the mire.
A wave of dizziness washed over me, and I leaned against the doorjamb. Something inside me gave way, and tears gushed out, drenching my face. A long moan broke loose from me, hanging in the air before it turned into racking sobs.
Michael was nowhere to be seen, but I heard the clatter of his steps and the back porch's door bang as if he had flown up the stairs.
I wiped my eyes and blew my nose. If I went inside now, everyone would see my face.
And now for the next 7 "tagees":
Rosi Hollenbeck
Richard Hughes
Lydia Kang
Joanna Marple
Alleged Author
Theresa Milstein
Kurt Chambers
I am looking forward to their 7 sentences, as I know you are. Go check them out, as they have good posts to read.
Meanwhile, any feedback you have for my 7 sentences I'll certainly appreciate.
oooh! I loved that! This meme has been really fun :)
ReplyDeleteI can't believe you packed so much detail and emotion into seven lines. That is amazing. :)
ReplyDeleteOoooo tension, emotion, memories.... love it, Elizabeth, and thank you for the tag. :)
ReplyDeleteVery interesting excerpt. I am intrigued and am eager to read more. The scene has a great tension.
ReplyDeleteVery vivid images and a lot of info packed into such a small snip. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAn interesting story unfolds, fun to play with.
ReplyDeleteLooks like a a pivotal scene for the protagonist.
ReplyDeleteI see my name! Thanks for thinking of me.
Thanks, all; appreciate the nice comments. Hope you are checking out each others' sites as well.
ReplyDeleteWhat I liked are the sensory details! Nice job...
ReplyDeleteThank you for the tag.
ReplyDeleteYou really are quite detailed in so little words!
ReplyDeleteI've really enjoyed reading these glimpess into everyone's stories. :)
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ReplyDeleteCongrats on the tag! And fun to read your excerpt. You've caught your character at a very vulnerable moment. You'd probably just use commas rather than semi-colons, though (semis are used to connect independent phrases that can stand on their own). And ha--must be a female character, worrying about her face and how she looks after crying! ;o)
ReplyDeleteCarol, thanks for the catch on the punctuation. (Why we need feedback!) Yes, this is a pivotal moment for the protagonist. She isn't worried about how she looks in the sense of vanity, though; she's worried about keeping strong for younger siblings; they've just had a terrible loss.
ReplyDeleteL. G., yes, I agree. It's nice to get a glimpse of what others are working on.
Alleged and Kenda, thanks for the comments about details. Details are sometimes a challenge, especially since this takes place in a different era.
Richard, you are quite welcome!
I found your seven lines very emotional and the detail of the surroundings really added to the punch. It kinda annoys me that this is all I get to see of your world.
ReplyDeleteAw, thanks, Tanya. When I finally finish this rewrite, I'm hoping you will get to see more of it in a hard bound book. :-)
ReplyDeleteBut then, another rewrite may be in order. Sigh.
Hi Elizabeth! Hooorah for being tagged and thank you for this extract! I feel so sorry for the MC - obviously hurting and in such emotional pain and turmoil!!
ReplyDeleteTake care
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Hi, Kitty, yes, she is,and it's not over, either. Do you ever feelguiltyfor putting your characters through hard times? I do.
ReplyDeleteAw I felt sorry for her. Your sentences made me wonder what had happened before, and what will happen next! A Model T, eh? So it's set at the turn of the last century, maybe?
ReplyDeleteAwwww! Thank you SO much for the tag, Elizabeth. I'm so sorry I only just saw this haha!!! I know, I'm so slow lol
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